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Monday, April 20, 2020


THE GIRL IN THE FISH BOAT

Ella had already travelled so far yet she still had so much further to go this was just the beginning of her journey . She began today like every other day sitting with her line in the cold deep water hoping to catch a bite for a delicious breakfast . It had been over three weeks since the land had disapeared. Today like most of the days it was dark and cloudy, the sun was trying to break through the clouds. The air was cold, Ella was grateful to have her warm coat with her it was red, it came down to her knees it kept her warm. She also had a white fluffy hat it had a pom pom on the top. Her boat was interesting. It looked like a a fish it had a fan on the tail it helped the boat sail. That day to Ellas suprise she caught a fish, she enjoyed her delicious meal inside her little boat. She cant wait to see her family again. After a big morning breakfast Ella felt sleepy she rubbed her eyes and decided to have a sleep in her little bed, she took off her warm red coat and her fluffy white hat then she jumped into bed, her bed felt like she was lying on a ton of Marshmellows, her blankets felt like warm fur, and the water rocking the boat  made her go to sleep. When Ella woke up she got out of bed, she went to have a look outside so she climbed up the metal brown ladder it was cold on her hands. She got to the top of the boat she climbed outside, when she looked around she realised she had slept the whole day and it was morning again. It was still dark and cloudy the air was freezing but she felt suprised because she could see land. Then she heard a horn, it was another boat which had a bright blue and red light she started to wave her arms around, it was a rescue boat, it pulled the boat to land. When they got to land the man from the rescue boat asked Ella her name luckily, Ella knew her mums phone number, they gave Ella a phone to call her mum. When Ellas mum got the call she was so happy that she rushed out the door and jumped into her big silver car to go pick up her special little girl.


     
     



7 comments:

  1. GREAT JOB MIKAYLA. FROM ZOE

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  2. Wow Mikayla - I am impressed!
    You have managed to write an interesting story for the reader using many adjectives. I would like to here what else might happen to Ella - please keep your story going. I can always help you more tomorrow in our workshops.
    Miss Gill.

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  3. Hi Mikayla,
    I love the part about the cold deep water and then her fluffy coat. It sound warm for the chilly day.
    Great writing.
    Can't wait to read more
    Mrs Roach

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  4. Hi Mikayla,

    Your story was so interesting to read. I like all the adjectives that you have included in your writing, it really makes me want to read more. How does Ella end up seeing her parents again?

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